TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are certain considerations or factors that everyone should take into account to investigate and examine advertisements. I certainly agree that most advertisements assist products to look better. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs represent conspicuous reasons to elaborate my preference.

Nowadays most of people follow celebrities or famous actors and actresses lives. For instance, youngsters think that they should wear or use what the celebrities do. So, marketing specialists use this idea as a way to attract people to buy their products. For example, using cosmetics is popular between women in all over the world. In fact they prefer to look beautiful and unique. Therefore, they search for some cosmetics which make them look younger and gorgeous. Besides, Television programs produce advertisement clips with a famous singer who wears foundation, mascara and lipstick of this brand. As a result, girls think that if they use this beauty product they will look like that singer. But they should first test it and then decide if it is suitable for their skin or not.

Furthermore, people tend to go to a restaurant that they heard or saw about it in advertisement. Many fancy restaurants send some magazines with lots of photographs of their luxury decoration and interior design. Consequently, it will be attract many customers by pictures but they may use Photoshop and other software to show their restaurant better than the real. Moreover, the most important feature for a good restaurant is their food quality not their decoration.

The last but not least, individuals usually prefer to buy comfortable shoes to walk and run easily. Some brands of shoes make some video clips on social media to show that people are satisfied with their products. For instance, in some advertisement they interview with teenagers who use their shoes and are happy with them. On the other hand, that kind of shoes may not suitable for old ones. But it will not shown that advertisement.

Due to aforementioned ground, all folks should bear in mind that advertisements try to show products better. Participation of quality, photography tricks and age preference are prime and conspicuous supports.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...to elaborate my preference. Nowadays most of people follow celebrities or famous actors and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25956284153 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95856224661 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568306010929 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2913234463 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.2083333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04166666667 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148104261413 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427629731322 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455117249241 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805576495265 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244646005112 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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