Nowadays, acquiring people's attention is much easier for a company than the recent decades. Social media and television channels both are mostly working on wide-spread advertising for companies to enhance their sells. Nevertheless, explanition and displays of the products in advertising sector can be a big impact to customers expectations. Advertisements want to make customers believe the products are easy to use, bigger than what to expect from the price and guaranteed to protect your items.
A good example is, I own a small company where we produce home furniture. After my sellings increased, I could not manage all my accounting proceesses with an old, handwriting method. I was looking up an accounting program to buy that would match with my demands. I saw an advertising from a website that offers a program with a promise of easily adaptation to this very unique and basic usage. I purchased the program which is named Parasut. I started using it right at that moment and tried to enter some of my bills. Information enterance was not sufficient and very simple as they promised. I handled with the program for five days to adopt and have an habit of using it but, it never worked out. The program was not easy to use. Furthermore, it was not dislaying the sections that advertisement was showing as profits. As far as I am concerned, advertisements try to make people that their item easy to use. But it is generally not.
In addition, Burger King is a world-wide company where in every brances of them offers very big and delicious hamburgers to its customers. A Burger King's advertisement always come up with a large hamburger emerging from the fire. For example, there was one of them with a big king hamburger. I was sitting at the office and before my luch time, I saw that video a large big king, saying that it is enough for your stomach and so tasty while eating. I went to a Burger King. Even if I prefer not to eat fast food, the advertisement changed my mind at least for once. I tried big king, expecting its size to be sufficient. But I totally had a dissapointment. It was just as small as inside of my hand. As a result, advertisements shows the big king larger than it is.
Lastly, most of us frequently use protection glass for our screen of smart phones. A screen of a smart phone is expensive hence, it is quite weak for any damage. For example, I saw an advertisement that expresses a new screen protector and says the product was made by the newest technology and it protect iphones better than any other products. The price was cheap and I ordered it from the internet as they promised the easy purchase. It arrived my office in two days and I opened the box very enthusiasticly but, what I saw was a shocking event. The protector which is made by a kind of glass was broken. How it would fit for my iphone and protect it if it can not protect itself. I directly reached to customer service buy there is no one to help me out. What a redicilous situation I had. Therefore, with a subsequent decision, I stopped buying any items just for belief of a reliable advertisement. Ths was the biggest dissapointment that I had from a product in my life.
To sum up, advertisements in general make people believe the items they offer would be the best fit for your needs. However, there are always dissapointments many people are having with their purchases. These kind of companies abviously lose their trust and sells subsequently by showing the products better than they really are.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 367, Rule ID: VERY_UNIQUE[1]
Message: Use simply 'unique'.
Suggestion: unique
... a promise of easily adaptation to this very unique and basic usage. I purchased the progra...
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Line 4, column 396, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...on to this very unique and basic usage. I purchased the program which is named Pa...
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Line 4, column 444, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sed the program which is named Parasut. I started using it right at that moment a...
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Line 4, column 463, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rights'?
Suggestion: rights
...ch is named Parasut. I started using it right at that moment and tried to enter some ...
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Line 4, column 655, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...program for five days to adopt and have an habit of using it but, it never worked ...
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Line 8, column 299, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'protects'?
Suggestion: protects
...as made by the newest technology and it protect iphones better than any other products....
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Line 10, column 204, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...people are having with their purchases. These kind of companies abviously lose their trust...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, look, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, in addition, in general, kind of, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2906.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 622.0 407.700716846 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67202572347 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99398916966 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85579606747 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488745980707 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 921.6 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6003584229 194% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8942746236 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.65 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.55 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.525 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121955425857 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286443933971 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307206102286 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852122901658 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416689746501 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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