In the twentieth century, people are more attracted to the variety of updated goods. Since the people are choosing changes, the companies are using broadcasting as a major source to publish their product to attract more customers. It is always a controversial topic because some people believe advertising is good for people to update their product knowledge and other casts a doubt on that. Personally, I don't think so the ads make the product better because most of the broadcasting hide the drawbacks of the product and also mislead the consumers with a different look than the original.
To begin with, the disadvantage of the products, when we take into consideration any product, the company always highlights the advantages of the item. It does not mean that the product is purely good because every device has both pro and cons. For example, recently my friend buys a new car. when he saw the display, they pointed only benefits of the care like spacious, comfort and so on but when he brought that car he found a lot of contrast details like less mileage and very congestive. When he said that to me, I decided not to buy any product by seeing ads.
Second, most of the published products seem unlike than the original because the company designs the ads more colorful than the original to attract the customers. For Instant, recently I ordered a new laptop through online when I was sawed the product bulletin, the computer was very beautiful and the shiny. However, when I got my order, I really feel bad and returned it because of it very hard color and worst than my old device.
In some, although the products look attractive in the advertisement, overall it misinterprets the product to create enthusiasm for consumers to improve their product sales. So, I never believe that ads help people to select the better product.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...er casts a doubt on that. Personally, I dont think so the ads make the product bette...
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Suggestion: When
...ple, recently my friend buys a new car. when he saw the display, they pointed only b...
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Message: Did you mean 'worse'?
Suggestion: worse
...ed it because of it very hard color and worst than my old device. In some, although...
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Line 4, column 245, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lp people to select the better product.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, really, second, so, thus, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82911392405 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64565289676 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550632911392 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3784158211 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108778056182 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03964208543 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325843358933 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701627430252 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196811844479 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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