TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The friends and lectures are the two important characters play a vital role in every student life. There is no doubt for the argument that who play an important role. Some people believe, friends are more impact on the students. And others not. Personally, I don’t believe that students are highly influenced by their lectures rather than their friends because they spend more time with their buddies and they are more comfortable with them.
First, Students spend a lot of time with friends and they admire by seeing them. For example, when I was studying High school at Omak public school, I had a friend who plays soccer well and everyone in the campus like his sports and I am not an excuse in that even though I don't like games, unconsciously I started playing soccer. I don't think so students had this kind of the impact from professors they spend very limited time hardly one to two hours a day.
Second, at students, they like more funny things like cracking jocks and maintain new styles and escape from the class and all those naughty things are only done by students. For Instance, when I was studying masters, my roommate used to imitate one of my professors in a funny way and the whole class like his Imitation. What more few months after his friendship I also started imitate others although it is not a nice habit, by seeing his popularity in the class I was influenced by him. I don't think so professors can do that. On other hand, teachers work is to teach lessons to students so it is very less chance of students are influenced with their professors.
In conclusion, whereas students and the professor are influenced the students since the students spend more time with friends and like to do funny things at that age they are more influenced by friends.

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...ge they are more influenced by friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44460110815 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501587301587 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2866764093 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18132989518 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064987639824 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810424079882 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132533273855 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675365524885 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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