TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We all know that teachers play an important role on the growth of students because they can teach students knowledge and principles about how to be a grown adult.So many people believe that students are highly influenced by their teachers. However, from my perspective, I hold that students are more influenced by their students than by their teachers.

To begin with, students usually have the same life targets or hobbies with their friends since they usually have the same age. Compared with spending time with teachers, students prefer to spend more time with their friends so friends are likely to influence each other.For example, my friends and I are interested in playing basketball. We usually spent all our spare time on talking about basketball or playing basketball.What's more, one of my friend became a great professional basketball player and we all tended to imiatate him. As a result, I play basketball better than before because I learn a lot from my friend. Meanwhile, a teacher would never have such a great influence on students because teachers usually have less in common with students.

Moreover, students are more influenced by their friends because friends know better about each other. Concretely speaking, a teacher usually need to pay attention to a large number of students since a teacher should be responsible to all the studetns in his or her class. As a result, he or she usually too busy to care about everyon in his or her classes. For example, since my teacher usually have to deal with a lot of stuff about my classmates in school, I usaully choose to have a talk with my friends while having a problem because my friends really understand me and it's a much more efficient way to solve my problem.

Although teachers could have a great influence on students since they can teach students knowledge and the truth of life, an everlasting friend may have a greater influence than a teacher in the long run .A teacher could only influence his or her students temporarily because the studetns may not contact their teachers after graduating. On the contrary, an everlasting friend could have an great influence on our whole life. So teachers do not have as great influence in the long run as everlasting friends do.

All in all, with the reasons mentioned above, I believe studetns are more influenced by their friends than by their teachers.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, really, so, while, for example, talking about, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39130434783 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19964258401 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451086956522 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 73.0 20.1344086022 363% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 215.589795677 48.9658058833 440% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 396.8 100.406767564 395% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 73.6 20.6045352989 357% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 23.6 5.45110844103 433% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.5376344086 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219043839808 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169583482105 0.076458572812 222% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554134879258 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169583482105 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554134879258 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.8 11.7677419355 347% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.62 58.1214874552 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.8 10.1575268817 313% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.17 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 31.2 10.0537634409 310% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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