TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a saying in our country that you can get to know a person by their friends. I truly believe this statement because friends can affect and change who we are and our personalities. Although some people think that teachers are biggest influencers for students,Ii disagree with this for following reasons. Students spend more time with their friends compared to their teachers moreover, their friends are more peers to them than teachers are.

Although teachers can influence students on how they behave, dress or learn friends can change their mindset and lifestyles. For example, there was a time when I had an ingenious and erudite teacher who knew everything that I asked her about and a friend who has been with me through my hardest times and knew everything about me. One day, I had to make a difficult choice which can determine my future-career. I always wanted to be a teacher, on the other hand I wanted to be a dancer too.
My teacher suggested me to find most demanding careers in the future and choose the on the list, so I ca be a successful and rich lady. On the other hand, my friend suggested me to find an answer in yourself. I could not understand that phrase for a while and was irate at her not being denote with me during my hard times and decided to look up in the internet for demanding careers. Of course teacher was there so I decided to become a teacher and started doing part time jobs while not talking to my friend. After a while, I understood that just by doing a job that is very highly valued does not mean that I will be successful in the future and finally realized what my friend tried to say. She implied that it is better if I became a dancer because she knew that I have been dancing since I was in the kindergarten and was enthusiastic about my passion.

Secondly, we spent more time with our friends than we do with teachers. According to me, there is a higher chance of being influenced by whom you spend the most of your time with. For example, my friend from volunteer project had a very adroit teacher who was very understandable and gave precise advises. On the other hand, he had a friend who was into was into computer games so much that he spent nights playing at game stations. He was an outstanding student who always got exalted by his teachers and colleagues. Unfortunately, his friend introduces him computer games. As a result, he became so addicted with games by losing control and started spending nights in the game center. Meanwhile, his grades were decreasing rapidly due to his absence in school.

In conclusion, students are more likely to get influenced by their friends rather than teachers according to my experience. Although one can have a brilliant teacher, but if he or she has a bad influencing friend even a good teacher can not hold them off.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'are the biggest'.
Suggestion: are the biggest
...lthough some people think that teachers are biggest influencers for students,Ii disagree wi...
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Line 1, column 266, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Ii
...ers are biggest influencers for students,Ii disagree with this for following reason...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: CA_PRP[2]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'can'?
Suggestion: can
...future and choose the on the list, so I ca be a successful and rich lady. On the o...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (ca) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ure and choose the on the list, so I ca be a successful and rich lady. On the othe...
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Line 4, column 465, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...d to become a teacher and started doing part time jobs while not talking to my friend. Af...
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Line 6, column 73, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...h our friends than we do with teachers. According to me, there is a higher chance of being infl...
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Line 6, column 346, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'was into'.
Suggestion: was into
... On the other hand, he had a friend who was into was into computer games so much that he spent ni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, of course, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58382642998 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61355438562 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46942800789 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5408804949 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193307072958 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648621879255 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731014624117 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137994568058 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866829096924 0.0645574589148 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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