TPO 18. Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Agree/ disagree?

In the last decade, the educational system has climbed extremely, as well as the relationships within. At the point, it can easily be questioned whether students, in this advanced educational environment, are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. From my perspective, although teachers' undeniable supervision, I firmly believe that students are more influenced by their friends because of the following reasons.

At top of the reasons, the age differences between teachers and students, especially at a younger age, plays a crutial role. Children trust other children, in fact, elders, such as parents and teachers, are enemies. Since interrelations between them depend more on children's common interests, friendships become trustworthy. However, teachers do not have the qualification of reliance on many primary school students. As a result, children are prone to believe more on what they heard from their friends, not from teachers. Take me as an example, about fifteen years ago when I was in third grade, our teacher was complaining from us not to sit quietly on our desk, indeed, she was yelling. We, on the other hand, were chatting during the lecture, and sure didn't listen to the teacher at all, because I had believed that the talk with my friend was interesting. Moreover, opportunities differ among generations, for instance, the absence of video games in the past, when today's teachers were children, youngers guess that their teachers are boring, and their knowledge is not credible.

The other following reason is the complexity of adolescent relationships in the academic environment. With the previous paragraph, I tried to explain why students are less, even none, influenced by their teacher, and now, it is time to jump in adults, university students. The projects and researches, usually, are held by groups of students, and these relationships which mean for a specific output may result in close friendships. Consequently, influencing environment appears in the group among friends. In fact, classmates and lab partners become our besties, and so, our influencers are not elder professors, but friends, coworkers. Besides respect, at some point, limits the communication with supervisors, unless they comfort their students.

In conclusion, even though the role of supervision of elders is undebatable for many students whether young or old, friends are the source of influence. By following the age difference reason in which teachers and primary school students relationship, the other reason is that the collaborators, at heart friends, are influencers of many university students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e chatting during the lecture, and sure didnt listen to the teacher at all, because I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, so, third, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4681372549 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.070340897 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2391053028 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.421052632 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52631578947 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305631387535 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922795842663 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968084678282 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206838610578 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095507253878 0.0645574589148 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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