There are more unsuccessful people than Successful people. What makes them successful? Some people believe that their's want to deal in a new way and prone to taking the risk along with their's ability to do a task perfectly.I, personally, agrees with the notion due to various reason.
First of all, creation of new kind of enterprise or doing things are usually likely to be successful. The best example can be taken from business study. There are various CEO, manager, who mostly spend their time contemplating about new plans, scheme. The basically don't apply rule which have been already applied by CEO of another like company. The new plans evaluated conscientiously is always to be successful. There was many such examples such as Bill Gates, Steve Jobs. The plan and enterprise,they opened, was completely new and unknown during the period of establishment. However, there are many CEO and manager who lately copied their plans but became unsuccessful since as time passes, the plans will be known to all and increase a chance of competition. Moreover, it can be seen in a student life also. For example, When I was at high school, besides learning the studying technique from the teacher, I also learned about new studying technique from the Internet website. Those which I supposed to be easier to implement and understand than teacher's technique, was adapted by me. It helped me during the exam time as I was able to do faster and any difficult task.
Secondly, trying new things and taking risk may excite a general people. We can, for instance, see about the recent presidential election of United states. Principal and idea-building was in mexico, proscribing muslims to enter united states-given by Donald Trump was completely new to the people of USA and he was also in a verge of taking risk. His ideas thralled most of the citizen, making him a elected president. In contrast, Hiliary Clinton principle was based on the mediocre idea, all men should be equal (idea which have been pesisted from the period of Abhram Lincon).
At last, we can also justify the benefit of taking risk and new idea in common way. If we have 100$, an invest full 100$, then the profit will also be high rather than investing 50$ instead. Similarly, new application have various new features, providing a many features to user. It may help them to do their office works in elegant manner,in short period of time,always keeping a pace from their competitors.
Thus, due to above mention reason I believe that to be a successful person, we have to learn to deal with risk and new thing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a new way" with adverb for "new"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...people believe that theirs want to deal in a new way and prone to taking the risk along with...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...h theirs ability to do a task perfectly.I, personally, agrees with the notion due...
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Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... about new plans, scheme. The basically dont apply rule which have been already appl...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...tes, Steve Jobs. The plan and enterprise,they opened, was completely new and unknown ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun CEO seems to be countable; consider using: 'many '.
Suggestion: many
...od of establishment. However, there are many CEO and manager who lately copied their pla...
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Line 3, column 612, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'managers'?
Suggestion: managers
...shment. However, there are many CEO and manager who lately copied their plans but becam...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...eover, it can be seen in a student life also. For example, When I was at high school...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hralled most of the citizen, making him a elected president. In contrast, Hiliary...
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Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
... and new idea in common way. If we have 100$, an invest full 100$, then the profit w...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ew idea in common way. If we have 100$, an invest full 100$, then the profit will also be...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
...on way. If we have 100$, an invest full 100$, then the profit will also be high rath...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$50'.
Suggestion: $50
...will also be high rather than investing 50$ instead. Similarly, new application hav...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
... do their office works in elegant manner,in short period of time,always keeping a p...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , always
...n elegant manner,in short period of time,always keeping a pace from their competitors. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, i suppose, in contrast, in short, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87074829932 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67808613584 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566893424036 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3897962102 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.92 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.64 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189904311339 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554855236707 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557332601449 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131429772639 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697805696013 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.