Being a successful person is a dream of all people since it offers many opportunities such as better career, higher salary or etc. There are, of course, plenty of components to reach success. Some people believe that you should have adequate knowledge to be successful whilst others claim that taking risks and trying new things are the key elements of reaching it. To my way of thinking, people should try new things and if it is necessary, take risks besides knowing how to do. In this essay, I will explain my reasons by supporting compiling examples.
To begin with, there are countless people who are professional and specialized in their areas so; the competence is harsh and the chance of getting ahead of them is pretty low. One of the most exciting things about the technology and development era is that either related to your field or not, there are countless new fields emerging day by day so; you can be one of those who try to make a career on one of them. For example, there are already a lot of car brands that have been in the market for years with great experiences. It is nearly impossible to make room for you among them. But the idea of the car working with electric power is a new idea and most of the current car brands using fossil fuel have not made an investment yet. I would like to mention Elon Musk who is one of the most successful entrepreneurs. He made investments in this field and worked hard. The result is that he leads the electric car industry and produces the best automobile in the world, which is Tesla.
But trying new things, sometimes, might not be enough to reach the success. You should make more than that and if it is necessary, take a risk. When we look at the most successful people, we can see that they accepted every horrible result of taking risks and went on. Instead of mentioning worldwide famous businessmen, I will tell the success story of Nusret who is a famous butcher and a boss of steakhouse chains. He grew in a poor family and had to leave the school in order to support his family financially. He has a dream of opening his own restaurant. Unfortunately, it was nearly impossible to open a restaurant without sufficient finance and having knowledge. He took the risk and decided to work at famous restaurants in different part of the world and improve his skills in that field without getting money for that. When he returned back to his own country, he opened his own business by borrowing money from his friend. There was a chance of being wiped away from the market but he took all the risks again. The result is that many famous people around the world, even the king of a country, go to his restaurants to eat. What I am saying is sometimes taking risk is necessary with knowledge.
To sum up, I believe that people should try new thing and take a risk to be successful. Sometimes there is no chance to do everything but taking a risk and sometimes, you may need to find a new field to make progress and be successful. People should not think just knowing how to do is enough for this.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 841, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'returned'.
Suggestion: returned
...without getting money for that. When he returned back to his own country, he opened his own b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, may, so, for example, of course, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2521.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50178571429 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53817222422 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473214285714 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2432255854 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0357142857 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231995870774 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649865704687 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678832480404 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166085617641 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762258649617 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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