TPO-21- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by sh on Sun, 01/27/2019 - 06:20

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the main factor that determines a person success in its future job would be work skills and good communication skill cannot replace it. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that today's most of the people who present in the top job positions earn their success through a relationship with powerful people, not because of their qualification. However, I, to a great extent, disagree with this idea that for success in a future job, the ability to related well to people is more important than study hard in school.

First and foremost, an appropriate knowledge around the tasks is the most important requirement for success. For example, last year I involved in a project at the Institute of Genetics Engineering, all team members were the expert people in this field. Nonetheless, our project was supervised by a manager he had not related educational background. As a result, this project stops because of a huge weakness of him in planning that led to budget failures.

Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that the essential working skills just brought about hard study at university. A professional employee is who is self-motivated by mean he/she can maintain its courage to doing tasks without outside forces and with the lowest supervision. It happens during all projects that some problems do not solve very quickly. In this condition, the only person who are well prepared for these kinds of situation will be able to withstand and try again and again until crack it.

Finally, yet importantly, it is true that make relationship with power owners can be assisted people to reach upper job positions, but it is not a warranty for success. First, not qualified people easily rejected by society. For example, a parliament representative fired after people be aware that his academic degree is fake. Furthermore, they would not be accepted among their co-worker. Thus, the ability of related well with people has a very lower impact on the success of a person.

On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that for success in the future job, studying hard in school would be more helpful than the ability of related well with people. Because good ability of relationship with others cannot cover a weakness in knowledge, self-motivation and problem-solving.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Independent TOEFL Writing

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, thus, well, for example, in fact, as a result, it is true, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07868020305 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8704820754 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555837563452 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.241215382 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.166666667 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30756349023 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972686081124 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1229588835 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180756918311 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955159634243 0.0645574589148 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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