Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by sh on Tue, 12/25/2018 - 11:38

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people do not have enough freedom in the idea, emotional appeals and choices. This condition is worse especially in countries that merit traditional beliefs. These huge rules that compel through society create a serious ban on young people happiness. Contrary, to this popular belief there are still those who argue that the rules that dictated by families or society to young people are always beneficial to them. However, I to a great extent, agree with this idea that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

First and foremost, today young people are too under the influence of their families. Parents make a decision instead of them for kinds of issues, even most personal decisions. For example, parents involved in children university chooses or even selection of a field of study. They not only do not take attention to their children interest, but also force them to change their mind. In most traditional countries young people have not allowed to choose their future spouse. If children make the opposite decision to them, it accounted as an impolite behavior and will be blamed by most people.

Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that In traditional societies which they value family as the basic unit of society, not individuals, being independent of the family before marriage, suppress by both families and society. For example, in my country Iran, most young people are financially dependent on their parents. Taking a part-time job is not common here, because often parents forbid children to take a job during their study at the university. They force children to just concentrate on their study instead of working. Moreover, a salary that provided through a part-time job is not adequate to support independent living. So young children could not separate from their family since they find a full-time job with high income.

Finally, yet importantly, there are some miss- beliefs between older people, that encourage young people for a luxurious life. Parents believe that young people should not start their own family until they would be able to own a big house, expensive car and high banking credit. These kinds of customs limited young people of marriage and significantly affected happiness in a negative way.

On the basis of reasons that was mentioned above, I am convinced that the rules that societies expect young people to follow are so unreliable. Because the lives of young people are too regulated by parents and social beliefs.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'choosing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: choosing
...countries young people have not allowed to choose their future spouse. If children make t...
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Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ge and significantly affected happiness in a negative way. On the basis of reasons that was m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, for example, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12971698113 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55570612766 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528301886792 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8442801346 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8636363636 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239018487303 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077695954198 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103571819366 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156847285708 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111488548991 0.0645574589148 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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