TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

It is totally accepted this fact that relationship has played undeniable role on today's lives. Nowadays, many people are agreed that a myriad of factors should be considered to evaluate people's ability to relate well with other people in the community. A challengable question which is most of the time raised regarding this issue is that why people for success in future job, must learn ability to communicate with other people. I firmly agree with this opinion that people who will be successful in future job, the ability to communicate well to people is more important that studying hard in school. In what foloows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons and examples.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that relationship in the community plays the role of functional in the structure of community. In fact, a good relationship in the community ensure suceessfully future job. Moreover, a recently study which has been conducted in the United Nations reveals this fact that relationship have a crucial role in today's people in their job in order to employee have a better service to their customers. This fact clarifies that communication can have a possitive effect on people's job. To illustrate, most people nowadays are more involved in their jobs and in this way promote their level of their job, lives, communication, and so on. Thus, people can be successful which have better relationship with other people in the community.
Another equally important reason is that better relationship lead to better financial income. To illustrate this fact, people have a profitable communication with other people, they can increase their income's positions. An empirical study in the asia shows that already 73 percent of Toyota's company could improve their financial situations in their jobs. This means that people who want boost their income, they can improve efficiency in their works and in near future can get a higher income with better situations.
Last but not the least form a psychological standpoint, people can have a better communicction with other people, they can mentally effect on their customer in their job. In addition, people can use different method which psychologist suggest them, they employee in their relationship with other people and in this way can satisfy their customer, fulfilment their career and so on.
To wrap it up, for success in future, people must pay more attention to their abilities such as relationship with other, in order to in near fauture ensure their jobs, and their level of their jobs. It is needless to say that people can promote their communicating with other people so that get a better financial situation in their jobs as well as satisfy their customer's need and so on.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('recently') instead an adjective, or a noun ('study') instead of another adjective.
...sure suceessfully future job. Moreover, a recently study which has been conducted in the United ...
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Line 8, column 28, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... and so on. To wrap it up, for success in future, people must pay more attention to thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, well, in addition, in fact, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2304.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07488986784 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76035748483 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433920704846 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4290107074 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.263157895 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8947368421 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19045374552 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832973821148 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755154786565 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132781162117 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821790015195 0.0645574589148 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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