Jobs are the ultimate goal of many peoples life. We are told from the beginning of our school and also in our college life to studying hard if we want our dream job. However, I do not fully comply with the statement that hard work is more important than soft skills to get a job. The reasons for my preference are explored in the further essay.
If we cannot relate well with other people how are we supposed to understand what we have to do in that job? Consider a case of an individual being interviewed for a job. If that fresher guy is asked the question “why he wants to join that company?” and provided that he does not relate himself with the company, then he would certainly give some vague answer which would negatively impact the chances of that fresher being selected for that job. So knowledge of his field did not even matter in this case.
Another good example of this type of situation comes from my personal experience. Recently, some companies came to our college to recruit us. Being among the top 10 percentile in my field of studies I was very confident that I would easily get selected because I thought hard is the only requirement for the job. But interview happened and the results came out it was totally the opposite of what I assumed. The results were shocking to most of my friends. Students who got selected were average students for the complete 4 years of the college. Most of them were not even in the class, while we studied and did the hard work. However, they got the job and we did not. Later, we came to know that the students who were rejected didn’t show the required soft skills for the job. To put in another way, there was a lack of communications skills among us. That day, I realized hard work isn’t the only key to success. Moreover, take the example of different employability tests taken in every country, nowadays. These standardized tests more about logical reasoning i.e. how we perceive the world in order to find out how well we relate to the company’s ideals.
In conclusion, I think that hard work is definitely one of the important aspects of getting a job, however in my cases or experiences relativeness with others has come out to be more important than hard work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: ASK_THE_QUESTION[1]
Message: Use simply 'asked' instead.
Suggestion: asked
...iewed for a job. If that fresher guy is asked the question 'why he wants to join that company...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, as to, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60545905707 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57432180055 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523573200993 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2986413235 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3636363636 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220475934533 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613375739079 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562819972265 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156484873684 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424480651955 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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