There are numerous considerations and factors that everyone must take into the account regarding success in the future career. In my opinion, people who are able to relate with others are more successful in their jobs as compared to the people who are only dependent on their degrees. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, the performance of all organizations is mainly dependent upon the productivity of its employee. Subsequently, productivity is married to how workers relate to each other within workplace. An employee who understands the requirement of their customers and position of their co-workers, and he can work proficiently in a team, which is responsible to the growth of the company. My husband’s experience is a compelling example of what I mean. My husband is working in the one of the renowned real estate company and he has magnificent communication skills. He is fluent in three languages, as we live in the part of Canada, which welcomes the people from various walks of the life. Because of his ability to relate with others, he is one of the skillful-worker in the company. The creativity which he puts in his work bring him in the limelight and this year his company honoured him with the promotion and he won the award of best employer. On the other hand, if he is not learned how to communicate well with others, it would be difficult for him to achieve success in this career.
Secondly, developing a well-rounded personality not only makes the things easier at workplace, but also renders the positive influence on the outsiders. From business point of view, this kind of charming personality brings better understanding and set up to success. My own experience is a proof of this. I am working as a dentist from last 5 years and in such a short period of time, I have already opened three branches of my clinic in different parts of the city. The reason behind my achievement is my team members, all the employees including other dentists, hygienists and assistants who are working with me, are well relate to each other as well as with the patients. Pleasing personality of staff members inspires the patient to come back at the clinics to continue further appointment. When you feel the progress in your career, it brings happiness in your life. In this way, connecting with others makes the smooth environment at the workplace and also proliferate your business.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that knowing how to deal and relate with others with your effective communication skills provides high-end salary jobs and people who work around you also feel constructive and encouraging at the workplace. So, it is the key of progress.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 947, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...with the promotion and he won the award of best employer. On the other hand, if he is n...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...t from last 5 years and in such a short period of time, I have already opened three branches o...
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Line 5, column 625, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'related'.
Suggestion: related
...tants who are working with me, are well relate to each other as well as with the patie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92872570194 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95620624815 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518358531317 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3950714172 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.727272727 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0454545455 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160631852551 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437074245767 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428051892927 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111823306309 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310403110612 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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