TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans
Today finding an appropriate job is the most important wishes of people and everyone tries to make the best job opportunities for themselves. Personally, I believe that studying hard in school can be more effective in finding a job than just has an excellent relationship with others. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, an individual who is very conscientious in education and study hard, can be successful in his learning and be professional in special knowledge. So he can be well known enough in that particular field that is attractive for the employers or even establishes his own job. It is obvious that employers are looking for experts for their job vacancies. Hence, well-educated one can be employed in pivotal roles in big companies. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a student, I was studying hard and always try to learn and understand lessons very well. Then I received the first GPA in the school. After my graduation I had three job offers from the different companies, those were due to my professional resume and high GPA. Finally, I chose one of them that most matches my favorites.
Secondly, although fine communication can make great job opportunities for someone, he will be responsible for some duties and if he is not capable enough for the responsibilities, he will lose that job. For instance, I had a friend who was not very serious in his education but had a complete social behavior and related very well with even unfamiliar people. Once he found a high prestige job in a significant company and he was responsible for a key role in that company. But after some months, he couldn’t do the defined responsibilities and the company lost one of the most important projects due to his mistakes. So he got fired by the company and lost that valuable job.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that well-educated individuals can have better job opportunities in the future. This is because they will be an expert in a special field and their real capabilities due to strong knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 226, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l capabilities due to strong knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84254143646 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05360095641 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522099447514 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7316980968 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2631578947 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195989961221 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626089248236 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448777147934 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089278728442 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050993105655 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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