TPO 21 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

Throughout the years, there was a general concern about which set of skills are more crucial for being successful in a job. Most people prefer learning the ability to communicate well with others but some of them are reluctant. They are most proud of their independence and their self-sufficiency, and they lack certain properties for their future works. I disagree with these people and I think that having communication skills are more useful for most kinds of jobs than only having the skills to do that job, and I have several reasons for that. I will elaborate on these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

First of all, in almost every job, collaboration is necessary for success. Nowadays, jobs are more group-oriented and projects need several different skills in different areas and therefore, they cannot be done individually. Hence, working together requires a set of communication skills that each person should have. I have to admit that my opinion is profoundly influenced by my personal experience. When I was a student at the university, I had Database Design course. This course had two individual assignments and three group projects. I was the kind of man that does everything on his own and does not rely on others, and mostly because of that, I did not care much about relating to others so I chose to be alone in my group projects. As expected, after the semester, I had an A+ for all of my individual assignments and I got B- for my group projects. Thus, I think this skill is a necessity for humans to be successful in their future works.

Another reason which is worth being discussed is that with relating and understanding each other in a group which has a single goal, people can achieve greater success. People have different characteristics with different preferences and different sets of skills, and in order to avoid any contentions and learn from each other, understanding them to a degree is critical. A group of Master's students in my university conducted research regarding this idea. They designed a simple group assignment in which collaboration was necessary. They chose thirty students from various majors and categorized them into ten groups. The set of people's skills in each of these groups were almost equal. Then they gave each group a goal for their assignment and they set off to complete that. Finally, after a specific time period, they took the results of each group. They found out that groups in which people had little familiarity with each other achieved better results.

In light of the reasons mentioned above, I severely believe that communication is a key feature for anyone, and people with a different set of skills need to work and collaborate with each other, and knowing others is beneficial for getting better results.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...e more group-oriented and projects need several different skills in different areas and therefore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, i think, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9552238806 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85568973008 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494669509595 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7673581999 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5416666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164126496975 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482643313325 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521449621187 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11812268245 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626202959675 0.0645574589148 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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