I certainly do not agree that to have a prosperous career in a future, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Somebody can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, modern technology forces people to study hard enough for success. These days, the world changes very swiftly and humankind experience a huge improvements in several fields of science and engineering including transportation, communications, health caring, and artificial intelligence. Because of this practical and theoretical progress all students need to study hard to be up to date with these new advancements. For instance, a computer engineer, who has a private business, cannot reach to an extreme interest rate or success with a perfect relationship. He mainly needs to know lots of things about digital instruments such as smart phones, camera, and television.
Furthermore, online business is another noticeable reason. Nowadays, internet connection not only assists all business merchants to extend their corporation and make countless money but also changes the way of interaction toward an impersonal communication. This type of connection is based on a simple email and text, and also the capability to relate well does not have the value that had in the past. Therefore, a future vocation cannot be success unless students study hard and get experience about online marketing.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that a successful job is more depended on the ability to relate well. Chiefly, based on a research, which has been carried out in Society Department of Utah University in 2016, a good connection increases customers' trust and assists companies and factories to gain more profits. However, still I affirm that studying hard in school have a higher priority. Although the ability of a good relation has some advantages, it does not grantee a profession success. Besides, any flaw in a product or service due to the lack of sufficient knowledge can reduce customers' trust and destroy a well known company.
Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that studying hard in school is more important. Participation of new inventions and electronic trading are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
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cannot be successful
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1903 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.157 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.957 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.863 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.023 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... get experience about online marketing. Admittedly, there are some justification...
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Line 7, column 663, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trust and destroy a well known company. Due to aforementioned ground, all folk s...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271186440678 0.229887763892 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.140435835351 0.158761421928 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.09200968523 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0702179176755 0.046263068375 152% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0121065375303 0.0685040099705 18% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.0992736077482 0.118717715034 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0217917675545 0.0351676179071 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.07578166811 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0363196125908 0.0309702414327 117% => OK
Particles: 0.00242130750605 0.00188951952338 128% => OK
Determiners: 0.0992736077482 0.0887237588012 112% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0121065375303 0.0209618222197 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00968523002421 0.0139019557991 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2332.0 2387.08602151 98% => OK
No of words: 369.0 408.028673835 90% => OK
Chars per words: 6.31978319783 5.86048508987 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.40379403794 0.338922669872 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.325203252033 0.251872472559 129% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.238482384824 0.174417080927 137% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.170731707317 0.112833075102 151% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07578166811 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612466124661 0.524397521467 117% => OK
Word variations: 74.1791562541 59.2087087015 125% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.4210526316 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6396432584 48.84282405 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.736842105 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 0.644075263715 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 51.9413778348 45.7405998639 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.76086956522 1.45489161554 121% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440981130476 0.300154397459 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0427633841061 0.103427244359 41% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0461792307719 0.0752933317313 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.463902252487 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132297517149 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145436332769 0.114077575197 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112001254395 0.0781384742642 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.270933909896 0.336927656856 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.021320780101 0.067059652881 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289403057384 0.210909579961 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892034234293 0.0618886996521 144% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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