TPO 21(independent)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that we living in the world where the human relationship is very important to have a happy, healthy and calm life. People who have an ability to relate well to others achieved more success during their vocation life. Contrary, to this popular belief there are still those who argue that success or failing of anyone in their job just related to hardworking and their qualification of each specific job. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that the ability of good relationship with people directly influences on success in the future job.
First and foremost, throughout of history of human existence in the earth, they were always lived in the form of group. They were need together for eliminating their needs for providing foods and protect themselves from natural dangers and in the wards. People through communication together feeling happy and calm thus, they were extension their relationship by an invention of language and talking and progressively shaped our complex society. Surely human without relationship could not survive until now.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that the ability of good relationship with the co-workers caused to create the positive environment in the workplace. All members of the group are more satisfied with their job so certainly it is led to increase in outcome efficiency of collection. in addition, clearly, all of the people who come to requested for a service preferred to associated with the employee who is have a kind and friendly behavior than an employee that cold behavior and just want to do its task. Therefore, the managers mostly consider the ability to relate well to others as an important factor to choose their new labors.
Finally, yet importantly, good relationship led to finding more opportunity for progress in the job.People those who make more friend obtain more suggestion for a new job position and this people are able to create the relationship with influential people and it is helpful for revied to a high level.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above , I am convinced that the ability of related good to people is very necessary for fortunate in the job and a happy life. Because, people with good ability of relationship are more acceptable and beloved by society and bosses than isolated people so they are more able to advancment.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in addition, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02506265664 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77532768336 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50626566416 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.5334148329 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289706650866 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100107850967 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753798422929 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174860921904 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073334197766 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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