In the modern society, people and companies are in close competition to acquire most property and success. They have different approaches to perform their missions. Some of them believes that it is very important to work quickly with making some mistakes but others prefer to work slowly without any mistake. As far as I am concern, working slowly and make sure that everything is correct is more important. I provide my opinion by two strong reasons which are stated below:
The first reason which deserve to be declared here is that, in competitive world it is more desirable to access high quality in order to influence costumers. Although all of the companies use advanced technologies to achieve mass production, but they establish some parts in their production lines to check production quality to eliminate every mistakes. So produce a commodity without any mistake has enormous effect in their credibility. For example, there are some cell phone companies all around the world and they are in close competition to achieve more success but the Apple phone which is the famous brand is more favorable than others because that company has a specific strategy to eliminate mistakes in that product. Therefore costumers are more satisfy when purchase their products.
Another reason which I am intended to point out here is that, new technologies develop every day to save time and access high velocity. But in contrast, these technologies caused people suffer from stress and mental or physical problems. In a company with advanced technology, employees should work quickly to adapt themselves with devices velocity and they should tolerate a lot of stress, so it leads to some irreparable mistakes such as occupational accident which employees hurt in that accident. For example, I am a labor inspector in my country, every months I receive some occupational accident reports in some companies and I decided to investigate in that companies and I did some risk assessments. All of my studies have illustrated that employees have mistakes when they work quickly. Therefore it is very important to us to eliminate every mistakes in our life or our workplace.
To draw a conclusion, in that technological world we face with numerous stress because of working quickly and it leads to some irreparable mistakes such as lower quality commodity and occupational accidents. Therefore working slowly to eliminate feasible mistakes is crucial factor in our life.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: EugeneDubinchuk
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...mistakes is crucial factor in our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, for example, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19095477387 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8303727357 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492462311558 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0017795127 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.529411765 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4117647059 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22612678475 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769426225036 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858302519909 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160183227042 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076743475825 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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