There is no gainsaying that teenagers should learn many things before their presence in society as adult people. There are some various methods and factors that can be useful and efficient for that. From my perspective, a part-time job is one of the best ones, since a part time job has many achievements for teenagers. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that teenager learn to be responsible. The great majority of teenagers have convenient life and they just spend time with their friends and social networks. So, they have no idea about the resposiblity and there is no doubt that responsibility confines the freedom. In better words, people do not like to take responsibility. Teenagers, who work part-time, they know that employer are strict about some duties and they do not behave like their kind parents. They comprehend that they should do their duties carefully and fast. Therefore, a part-time job help teenager to experience a new and hard circumstnce and they would be detached from their fantasy life in parents home.
The second point that comes to my mind is that most of teeangers just cost their money and they have no idea about saving or budget. In better words, teenagers should be taught about the financial decsions. As far as I'm concerned, most of the schools has no plan for teaching the finanacial bases to students and studends have no comprehension about the economic and financial issues. A part-time work help teenagers to know more about some terms like income, cost, saving, doposti and etc. they learn to make planning for their earning and they try hard to achieve their financial planing. Hence, a part-time job has a pivotal role for teenagers to learn plenty things about the financial issues.
Last but not least, teenagers just spend most of their time with their friend and families. When they do a part-time job, they envitably should have a good relation with people and interaction is useful experience for teeanagers especially in their adult life. Since, they have enogh experiece to have a proper interaction with their coleagues and managers. Hence, a part-time job expand the teenagers interacations and they learn many things through this interaction.
in conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, the advantages of a part time outweigh ist' diadvatages and teenager should experience a part time job.
- TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and ex 73
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- T O E F L - T P O 34 85
- TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task 78
- TPO 41 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12280701754 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78043264817 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478696741855 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0989313453 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9090909091 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13636363636 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235918781381 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835203720804 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582778752727 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158282307844 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330965832137 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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