Teenage is a crucial time to build one's future. It is the time where a person should fucus on career building, develop a strong personality, and spend time with family to learn social value and so on. If a person spend all those time running after money that will not help him/her a lot in the future. So, I think perents should help their teenage childern to prepare for their adult life instead of encourage them to earn money for several reasons.
First of all, it is the time for a teenage children to fucus on their study. If a children does not study enough and earn sufuciant score that will hamper their further higher study. For instance, when i was a kid, my parents always encouraged me to study hard to fullfill my dream. From my early stage of education, i was good at mathematics and other science subjects. So, from my childhood i dreamed about becoming a engineer. For this reason, I worked hard and got admitted into an engineering university. Without my parents encourage it would not be possible.
Secondly, parents should encourage to build a stong personality and value. Parents should teach their children that respect and recognize is more valuable than money. For example, my mother is a school teacher. Though she does not earn a lot, she is respected by her work. She tought me that earning money is easy but gaining respect and trust form other is hard to get. When I got government scholarship in primary level, everybody appresiated my talent and i learn that respect is more important than money.
Finally, A part-time job would create distance from his family as they have to work and study simultiniously and it is reallyy hard for a children. For instance, one of my cousin worded as a delivary-boy in a local newspaper. As he has to work, often time he was tired. For this reason he failed to get good result in the examination. Eventually, he failed to get admit in a renown university.
In conclusion, working on a part-time job may have help a student to get some money but it would not help to build his career and personality. So, parents should encourage their teenage children for prepare for their adult life in a good manner.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Teenage is a crucial time to build ones future. It is the time where a person s...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
...st of all, it is the time for a teenage children to fucus on their study. If a children ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...ge children to fucus on their study. If a children does not study enough and earn sufucian...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...urther higher study. For instance, when i was a kid, my parents always encouraged...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ream. From my early stage of education, i was good at mathematics and other scien...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...science subjects. So, from my childhood i dreamed about becoming a engineer. For ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...m my childhood i dreamed about becoming a engineer. For this reason, I worked har...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...el, everybody appresiated my talent and i learn that respect is more important th...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...multiniously and it is reallyy hard for a children. For instance, one of my cousin worded ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67012987013 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60289030677 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0428396371 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9166666667 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0416666667 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319874224707 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091552293389 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101237476703 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204427358914 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117035935428 0.0645574589148 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.