TPO 26: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Work has a great influences on our lives. It has a major impact on our overall well-being because it affect our live directly. Therefore, I strongly disagree with the statement that it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents. This is due to the fact that they may have different interests and decrease the pressure over them.
To begin with, people should have the freedom to choose their major because every person has different interests than the others even parents. In fact, people can be more creative if they select their major because they can work around something they like. For example, if parents of a teenager boy force him to study science in order to become a doctor as them, he might fail because he thinks that it is boring. Furthermore, parents have to encourage their children to discover what they really like and what pleasure them the most because by knowing these things, they can pick the major that suits them the most. Thus, it is better for children to choose their own path because they will spend most of their time in the future doing this thing.
Another reason why I think this is the ultimate approach is children can feel more pressure if they choose to work as their parents. Indeed, people may compare between the father and his son, which can be stressful. For instance, when a well-known painter make his daughter, who does not have as much artistic talent as him, to paint people may hurt her by saying that she is not good as her father and she should stop what she is doing. Moreover, this kind of stress can ruin relationships among family members because children can blame their parents for their failure. Hence, children have to choose jobs that make them happy no matter what their parents work.
For the aforementioned reasons, I genuinely disagree that children can benefit more if they have jobs similar to their parents. Hopefully, more parents will give the freedom to their children to choose their major and jobs in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: affects
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75852272727 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28063786647 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488636363636 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.861513914 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6875 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287926127524 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122581474438 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121376522441 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219681427282 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677079918358 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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