Recently, general awareness about whether children should choose jobs similar their parents has aroused heated arguments. Nevertheless, people have different opinions. Since the process of exploring one's interest and determining their future career is a long adventure and also very risky, some parents believe it is better for their child to have the same job as their's since they can support each other and get less stress in choosing their job. However, in my point of view, I disagree with the statement because children may have different interests from their parents. Also, children may find it annoying to have same jobs with their parents as they get compared.
To begin with, even between parents and children, their specific interests and talents may vary. Therefore, insisting their child to have the same job as their parents without enough consideration may restrict children's potential. As a result, children may have confusion and uncertain about their future career. Also, the discord can create conflict between parents and children. For example, I had a friend whose parent's were both famous football superstars. Both of his parent's wanted him to be a professional football player, however he was more interested in baseball and discovered he had talent for it. Unfortunately, his parents insisted him to play in a high school football team even was bad at it. As a result, he still finds difficulties in planning for his future career, and complains about his parent's pressure. Furthermore, he might have to face financial problems in the future as he find it hard to search for a job. Therefore, children instead of following their parent's career, have to actively search their field of interest and explore many possibilities. There are many resources more reliable than parent's opinion out there, so children should discreetly find their profession. Having the same job as parents without much pondering may lead to terrible results to both parents and children.
In addition, children feel uncomfortable to have same jobs with their parents as they are constantly compared with their parent's skills and achievements. If they are inexperienced and unskilled, they will get depressed and regret about their choice. As an example, my friend's family own's bakery renowned for it's delicious and crispy pastry. Their parent's retired from their job and turned the business over to their daughter who learned bakery in France. However, her baking skills were still immature in comparison with their parent's. She constantly received complaints from the customers that the quality of the pastry has fallen. As a result, she was deeply depressed and even considered quitting the job many times. Furthermore, her parent's started to grumble about her baking skills. Finally, she sold the business and quarreled with her parent's over the matter. As you can see, children having the same job with their parents have to endure the criticism from comparison. Therefore, children following the same career with their parents isn't a very wise choice.
In conclusion, it is not beneficial for parents to insist their children to have the same job as theirs as children may have different field of interest with their parents and also may get stressed from being compared with their parents. Children utilizing resources, have to have time considering about their future rather than thoughtlessly determining their career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...pinions. Since the process of exploring ones interest and determining their future c...
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Line 3, column 902, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
... financial problems in the future as he find it hard to search for a job. Therefore,...
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Line 5, column 1044, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...wing the same career with their parents isnt a very wise choice. In conclusion, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2886.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2760511883 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67005818017 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449725776965 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 862.2 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2763318435 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2333333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96666666667 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.85842293907 441% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408775853643 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135640552897 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093195922122 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313852612325 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539761059591 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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