TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Job security is one of important parts of our live. Every on needs to work to earn his living expenses, above all, we need to work because of our resoinsibility to our family. Some people believe that if people have the opportunity to get a secure hob, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would he more satisfying. If I had the chance to get a secure job, I would take it immediately for some important reasons.
The most important reason is that a secure job provides health insurance. Having a secure job guarantee the health insurance. For example, in my countray, where is one of third world countries, although the costs of treatment is not considerably high, not only because there are not enough employment opportunity but also because of economy recession in my country there are a very harsh living conditions. I work as a lecturer at university, a low-paid job, it does not provide all of my needs. So I have to work as a typist in my home. Though it does not seem ideal, I do other people projects. AS you can see, poor economy my country finding a secure job is ambition of every one.
Second, having a secure job does not have any stress. Some people who does not have a secure job always are anxious about refiring thire current job. For example, my brother Mahdi, who work at a private company, always has anxious about dismissing from his job. Sometimes I can see such stress not only on my parents but also his wife are anxious about this bad conditions. When I see my brother, he is searching for a secure job.
To sum up, having a secure job not only provides health insurance but also it eliminates the anxious of unemployment. The government should design some programs that remove these type of bad disadvantages of not having a secure job or create mane new jobs.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, third, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52887537994 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60362335851 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492401215805 0.524837075471 94% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0070702526 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7777777778 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306801708287 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117537410385 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109732142889 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19858254119 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810811322209 0.0645574589148 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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