TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Nowadays people should take a job to solve their financial problems, and improve the quality of their life but the satisfy of your job is the most important things that everyone should pay attention about it. In my opinion, people should study in major that they have talent and absolutely love it and after they are graduated they should find a job same as that filed they were study.

First, some people follow their dreams and takes lots of risk to catch their lovely job, so every morning they wake up happily with full of positive energy to start their work until night. For example, I studied take care of cancer children as a nurse, and I really enjoy to help them, because in 2009, my son dead because of a tumor he had in his head and all the time I was studied at home and search about this sickness, and I started a university to how become nurse, but unfortunately we lose him with all that medicine, also now I know that they are a few time to live but our clinical just due to makes them happy. And I love my job.

Second, some people just think about how they can, make money and the way isn’t important to them. most of them never think about community and they just think about their benefit, so these people say yes to all the opportunity they have. For example, my aunt is business woman and when she was 19 the company offered her to came and started a job as a consulted for their office and she accepted while she hated that job she continued it and got progress without any satisfy, and it’s not matter to her.

In summarize, it’s depend on people to decide what they want of their life, some people think satisfy is the most important and other think make money is the most important thing in the world.
But I prefer to follow my dreams, it’s not matter how much time I lose if find my lovely job, I will get it. I hope to all the people in the world find their favorite job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d improve the quality of their life but the satisfy of your job is the most important thing...
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Line 3, column 559, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
...dicine, also now I know that they are a few time to live but our clinical just due to ma...
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Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Most
...d the way isn't important to them. most of them never think about community and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, while, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34903047091 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14518211559 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512465373961 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.398129605 48.9658058833 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 142.727272727 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8181818182 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189940159633 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089756551894 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384593371322 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116571179436 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050938241895 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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