TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

As far as i am concerned people should take a job that they love to do because not only does it increase their incentive, but also it has some proffits for person and for society.

The first reason which should be stated here is that when a person do a job that he loves he do it better. Infact there is close relationship between work's quality and people's feeling. For example, when you are an police officer but its not based on your desire you do not do your best. Therefore, you just do the job for it's money. Moreover if you do not like a job the time go slow and rough during the work and person always says to himself that when the time comes for me to go home. However one at first may not like his job but after a time he become interested in that job.

Another point which deserves some words is that affection that the high quality doing jobs on the people and society cannot be neglected. In another words many peoples in America do their best at work and the result can be seen in their succession in their economy, politic, and so on. Moreover when peoples do jobs better they have pleasant feeling about theirselves and this may have some affection in their life. As an example when one person come home with a good feeling, he may treat better with his or her family and this can effect their familie's mood and their reactions in jobs. To make it more obvious the good treating can encourage people to do works as better as they can and society and people both benefits from this.

Consequently, based on what sayed above it is recommended that people should wait until they find their best work that they are built for it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
As far as i am concerned people should take a job t...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...when a person do a job that he loves he do it better. Infact there is close relati...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ples feeling. For example, when you are an police officer but its not based on you...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ore, you just do the job for its money. Moreover if you do not like a job the time go sl...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...n in their economy, politic, and so on. Moreover when peoples do jobs better they have p...
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Line 5, column 675, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... encourage people to do works as better as they can and society and people both be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3538961039 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1565750404 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50974025974 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1658684164 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.153846154 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247201711294 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105565280456 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476107846307 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161216226556 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030726432741 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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