TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

No, I disagree with the proposed statement. In my view, the best job for the people is one which
their love it, albeit they may find it too hard. I support my statement with the following reasons.

First, people who have their satisfying and interesting job usually be more successful than other who just work to spend their life. For example, one of my friends was so interested in the painting. He told me in his youthful he had a harsh period in his life and he should fight with many unpleasant events. In that time he forced by that bad conditions to work in an office just for money but, he thrived his time so obsessively and when he had an extra time he started to paint and sold it his paintings after the leaving the office at night. After a while his paintings got a huge attentions from people and also famous artistes in Tehran. Now he has a gallery and he just painting all the day. He is very successful because he worked hard and didn't leave his interesting job and finally got his favorite vocation.

Second, people apparently are so productive if they placed in their favorable job. I think one of the most important features of the developed countries is that their people choose their interests rather than available vocations or jobs only with high salaries. Also government of the developed countries prepares the conditions which their people can find their interests much easier. For example in United Kingdom students have self-confidence classes during their childhood and they grow with such a worthful characteristics. So, when they go to the university, they choose their interesting field and in result they persuade they studies vigorously. Therefore when they become graduate they are so expertise in their profession and can handle their jobs much efficiently. Finally the output of this procedure is a set of productive people who can put their society in higher places.

Finally I can conclude that with choosing the satisfying jobs people can be more succesful and also they can
work more efficiently and be productive. So its so better to choose the interesting job than ones just can make money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y successful because he worked hard and didnt leave his interesting job and finally g...
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Suggestion: Also,
...ations or jobs only with high salaries. Also government of the developed countries p...
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...hood and they grow with such a worthful characteristics. So, when they go to the university, th...
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... field and in result they persuade they studies vigorously. Therefore when they become ...
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... they persuade they studies vigorously. Therefore when they become graduate they are so e...
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Suggestion: Finally,
...can handle their jobs much efficiently. Finally the output of this procedure is a set o...
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Suggestion: Finally,
... put their society in higher places. Finally I can conclude that with choosing the s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83423913043 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67886686529 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516304347826 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5863006102 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6315789474 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182463120022 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072211389889 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482607324374 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122293580289 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401544833049 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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