TPO 27 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying Use specific reasons and ex

Nowadays, with the proliferation of human population, the difficulty of getting a decent job is spiking. So, from my own perspective, I am afraid I have to disagree with the statement that people should wait for a more satisfying job rather than to choose a secure job. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.

First of all, experience you could earn from a secure job will offer advantage to you when you are going to replace it with the other job in the future. Maybe you cannot earn a generous salary from it, but a vital part of working as soon as possible is that you could accumulate understanding of the society and interpersonal interaction skills. In contrast, if you insist in waiting for a so-called better job, you might miss the opportunity when the better job actually hit on your head since you have wasted so much precious time.

Secondly, the pursue of "better" is endless. The essence of human-being is that we never satisfy with current conditions. As a result, we always stare at so-called better things like higher grades, bigger house and fancier cars. We cannot stop the motivation to earn a higher-quality life. I have to admit it does exert many positive effects on human. Nevertheless, it makes us neglect the existing happy life since, in fact, most citizens do not need so much fortune to raise their sense of happiness. Therefore, comparing with pursue for "better", I suggest you to enjoy the current well-to-do life.

At last, it is a sensible tactic to arrive a destination far away from you present position step by step. In other words we should cut a massive and difficult task into several smaller and easier stages. The unattractive secure job is not the end of your life. On contrary, you could imagine it to a bridge that connects with your dream workplace, which could assist you to overcome the insurmountable gap and finally arrive there.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should seize a secure job opportunity rather than waiting for a better job that could provide higher salary. This is because we should obtain social experience as soon as possible; and because "better" is not exist;and because we can simplify the terrifying task of making dream come true via this wise tactic.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, as a result, first of all, i am afraid, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92875318066 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9639976169 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554707379135 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1742900643 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.947368421 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1052631579 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307331278057 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905724502129 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983882849622 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178387861598 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0940915334634 0.0645574589148 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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