TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

These days, one of the fundamental factor in order to be hired in a suitable job position is having an academic educational back ground regarding the job position. Even though some people believe that the children's future life depends on their own selves, I am of the conviction that because of the following reasons parents have a noticeable role in children's education.

The fisrt reason is that scholar policy has been altered through time. Due to that, the parent institutions have been founded and these committes conduct a meeting at least every month, which are mandatory for parents to be present at. In addition, based on modernized scholar policy, parents must contribute children to do their homeworks. For instance, parents design mathematic questions for the children's practice or take a little home quize.

Furthermore, compared to the past time, cultural modification has been occured among people. In other sense, parents have obtained knowledge regarding education and this leads to a high level priority for education. Indeed, social statues would be given to people if their children had been gained high level education degrees and parents would be proud of their children's triumphs. Due to this priority, parents investigate tremendous money on children education. So, the more they investigate, the more they expected from children education. As far as parents conceren, they wpuld involve directly on children's education.

Last but not the least, living styles have been changed. In previous decades, both mthers and fathers were working on farmlands or other jobs and they did not have lots of time for children. However, nowadays, among most of the people, one of them works during the office hours, which are at the same time with school times. Hence, parents could review their children's homeworks in the evening or on weekends. In addition, mothers have more social interaction and by using that they can get reports of children's education directly from the teachers.

To sum up, in my opinion, parents are affecting directly children's education because they must follow school policy, some cultular alternations have been occured and they have more times compared to the past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...quize. Furthermore, compared to the past time, cultural modification has been occured...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, so, at least, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28328611898 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62263590101 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56657223796 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7263283139 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.611111111 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6111111111 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22373832696 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079293708006 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465469667471 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135847998942 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281048399682 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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one of the fundamental factor
one of the fundamental factors

if their children had been gained high level education degrees
if their children had gained high level education degrees //this is not passive voice. the subject is people

Sentence: Due to this priority, parents investigate tremendous money on children education.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and education

Sentence: So, the more they investigate, the more they expected from children education.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and education

Sentence: The fisrt reason is that scholar policy has been altered through time.
Error: fisrt Suggestion: first

Sentence: Due to that, the parent institutions have been founded and these committes conduct a meeting at least every month, which are mandatory for parents to be present at.
Error: committes Suggestion: committed

Sentence: For instance, parents design mathematic questions for the children's practice or take a little home quize.
Error: quize Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: mathematic Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Furthermore, compared to the past time, cultural modification has been occured among people.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: As far as parents conceren, they wpuld involve directly on children's education.
Error: wpuld Suggestion: would
Error: conceren Suggestion: concern

Sentence: In previous decades, both mthers and fathers were working on farmlands or other jobs and they did not have lots of time for children.
Error: mthers Suggestion: others

Sentence: To sum up, in my opinion, parents are affecting directly children's education because they must follow school policy, some cultular alternations have been occured and they have more times compared to the past.
Error: cultular Suggestion: cultural
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1813 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.136 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.776 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5