TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Education became an important step in people’s life. Likewise, parents was trying to provide their children with the best education all the times. However, I believe that nowadays they spend a lot of time and money for making good education more affortable for their children. I will explain my position by providing several examples to support my point of view.

In the first place, education became more valuable nowadays, because most of the companies demand from their employes to have a bachelor or masters degree. In other words, for beeing competitive for good vacancy you need to graduate from good university first. On the other hand, a century ago, there wasn’t such rules for person who wanted to get a perspective job position. He or she could study for a year on the special courses and get a general diploma of gaining or improving their qualification. Therefore, parents today try to provide their children with an opportunity to get a good work position in the future and invest their money to the child’s future.

Secondly, some parents, who are in the middle class, didn’t have a good education, so they want to provide their children with a chance to get one. For example, there was a lot of students in my group who came to study in Moscow from the russian villages. They usually was the first from their siblings who get a chence to enroll to the one of the Moscow’s state university. In the light of above, I eager to say that sometimes all family invest money in the future education of a child and trying to do their best to support.

To wrap up, education today plays a valuable and important role in every children’s life. More to say, during university a child not anly getting an important education but also building his or her picture of the world. And no doubts parents no matter what should support their offsprings on this hard rode.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was usually
... Moscow from the russian villages. They usually was the first from their siblings who get a...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, no doubt, in other words, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82874617737 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70001660841 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535168195719 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1866300727 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.6875 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4375 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8125 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204982696963 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738048805741 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506616156323 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140350857865 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316905802376 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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