TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The reading and the lecture are both about Rembrandt and whether the portrait of the woman was actually painted by him or not. The author asserts that there are some clues that this painting doesn’t represent the Rembrandt’s style. However, the lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. She supposes this painting is definitely the work of Rembrandt.

First of all, the author points on the mistakes in light’s representation of a natural illumination. Rembrandt was a master of illumination and he wasn’t able to make such inappropriate mistakes. This point is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that, nowadays, the colour of the painting is not the original one. The painting was recoloured for making it more valuable and expensive, by choosing a different colour painter tended to make the woman’s portrait more aristocratic. Furthermore, she asserts that the original painting has good sense of illumination, dark and bright areas on the fur collar and woman’s face fitted together naturally and perfectly.

Secondly, the author contends Rembrandt never used a panel made of several pieces as a back of his paintings. The article notes, that the painting known to be made by Rembrandt has a panel glued together in this way. The lecturer rebuts this argument, and she believes that these glued pieces weren't made by the famous artist. These changes had aimed to enlarge the painting. Also, lecturer says that the main part of the painting’s back was made from the same tree, that was used in other Rembrandt’s works.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...nd she believes that these glued pieces werent made by the famous artist. These change...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 255.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21960784314 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02989335597 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8450331493 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7333333333 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44456914702 0.272083759551 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155240024525 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108203559487 0.0662205650399 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321409431703 0.162205337803 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630207826218 0.0443174109184 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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