TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, education is a prominent part's of everyone life which has always engendered caused debates among people about all aspect's of that. One noticeable question is that whether parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past. While some people believe this statement is not true, I hold the opposite view. Parents today pay excessive attention to education. Following paragraphs will delve into my points of view for some significant reasons.
First, contemporaneously education is one of the significant condition for finding a job. Parents are worried about the children's future and how they will overcome the obstacle of handling their life thus they pay attention to the children's education which can meet one of qualification for earning money and meet convenient life for themselves. Take a personal example, my parents always want me to study my lessons and have a graduate degree from a known and valid university. They think in this way I will be more expert ,therefore, I acheive more lucrative and secure job. After I finished my graduate studying I found a well-paid job and it was easier for me rather than my friend who did not have a graduate degree.
Second, education and schools are not just limited to science, moreover, they will learn the student social skills like communication with others and how to overcome their obstacle in the school with their friends. As parents want their children to be mature and wise, they want to find an appropriate school which has a positive and informative environment for them. For instance, group works, and dealing with new people are some instructive happening in the school which can improve the student social skills. In addition, some task like presentation will boost their self-confidence.
In brief, in nowadays society and life, education pays noticeable effects on children's lives, as a result, parents have a tendency to meet a good situation for their children future.

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...ent for them. For instance, group works, and dealing with new people are some ins...
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...oost their self-confidence. In brief, in nowadays society and life, education pays notice...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in brief, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13888888889 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80998306064 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6873252164 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212028731811 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797993069957 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907190100244 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142252400805 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057240218646 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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