Nowadays, the advent of technology provides an environment that is harder for young students to flourish in. In order to one become beneficial for society, he has to gain a lot of knowledge and be expert in a specific field. To be more specific, we have to provide a more qualified educational system in which students can achieve a lot of knowledge. In this regard, there is a controversy amongst people that to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on university professors' salaries. I am personally in favor of this approach. I cling to my viewpoint for two reasons and will illustrate them in the following.
The first facet to be mentioned is when a professor is supported with the salary that comes from the university, he can afford his family and his own needs, therefore, his mind is calm and he can concentrate on his duty which is to teach students efficiently. In other words, when one is relief from the pressure of living cost, he becomes a more efficient person for the society due to the fact that his mind is not occupied with personal problems. To clarify my point, let me take myself as an example, when I was twenty, I taught English in a class but the payment was too low. I could not afford my living cost so I had to get a second job to cover my costs. As a result, I was not concentrated on my teaching process because I was tired whenever I was in my class. On the other hand, when I was twenty-five, I had a job as a TA in university, they paid me well in a way that I could cover all my costs, therefore, I did not get a second job and I was concentrated fully on my TA duties.
Apart from the point mentioned above, when one is paid a great amount of salary, he is willing to engage more in his duties. To be more clear, when someone is paid well, he takes the job more seriously and tries to be as beneficial as he can because he admires that opportunity that he has been given. To clarify my point, take a university professor as an example, suppose that he is paid well, he takes the class as his number one duty and makes a lot of effort to be more engaged in his responsibilities as a professor. In contradicts to this remark, assume a professor who gets a low salary, he is not willing to do his best in the classroom due to the fact that he believes he deserves more so in order to show his protest, he does not engage in the class activities.
All in all, according to the foregoing points and examples, I believe that an improvement in the university professors' salaries is a vital step toward an improvement in the quality of education. Nevertheless, there may be opposing perspectives that it is not the controversial issue in the way of high-quality education but from the standpoint of having more beneficial professors, I believe this approach is inevitable.
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- TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, apart from, as to, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4011741683 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84137137014 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438356164384 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5026219257 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.294117647 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0588235294 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0858717553727 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319151343298 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535968622374 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770902086008 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581888683615 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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