Friends are the most important part of the everyone's life. Through friends, human can extend their communication environments much wider. Some people may think making new friends is more crucial than holding the old ones because we have a better chance of experiencing new things. However, I think it is more critical to stick to old friends for two reasons.
To begin with, close friends can benefit us in many ways. When we become closed to someone else we can confide about our problems that we encounter during the course of our lives. In order to achieve this closeness, we need to keep our old friends because deepening the human relationships takes a lot of time. For example, one of my colleagues was used to develop new friendships when he changed his workplace and employed in a new company. He was inclined to forget his previous co-workers. However, he was fired from his job as a result of the economic crisis. Since networking is one of most essential ways of finding jobs, he called his previous colleagues. Because he did not have any contact with them for a few years, no one introduced him to his manager for obtaining a new job. As a result, he had a very tough financial situation and had to find a casual job in order to cover his expenses. Nevertheless, this is not the only reason that I think keeping old friends is more important that finding the new ones.
Apart from the benefits that old friend can have for us; there are always a limited number of people that can match us perfectly. As it is obvious, it is better to find friends who are similar to us because we usually want to associate with people who have similar interests. If we get used to not keeping our old friends, we get to a point that we cannot find a person whose personality match ours.
To summarize, I think it is more essential to maintain our old friends rather than finding new ones because old friends can be more advantageous for us and finding new friend who has a similar interest is a difficult task
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...se friends can benefit us in many ways. When we become closed to someone else we can...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...de about our problems that we encounter during the course of our lives. In order to achieve this clo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, apart from, for example, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57182320442 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58667548848 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494475138122 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3289330321 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9444444444 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258640765943 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892691817205 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958062306515 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201857753602 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922266816901 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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