TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Since the beginning of civilization, job was of the prominent part of everyone’s live which has effects on all aspect of individual live. One of the significant question is this regard is whether it is better to have a three days a week work for long hours or a five days a week for shorter hours. While most people prefer to work three days a week, I concede that it has some deleterious disadvantages. There are several reasons for this claim but the ensuing paragraphs will delve into the most salient reason.

To begin with, long hours of working can decrease the efficiency. Long hours absolutely makes the worker tired at the end of the day, therefore, it would be more difficult for them to concentrate on their tasks. Recently, a survey on this topic in our company indicated that efficient of working after a long time decreases due to lack of concentration and energy. It implies that shorter time is better because after a long time of working, brain is not fresh enough to solve problems.

Beside efficiency decreasing, employments should have enough time to spend with their family during the day. If employments work for long hours, they would not have enough time for their family and especially their children. I think, spending time with family should not be limited to the weekend as gathering of family every night can firmly inspire all of them. For instance, my uncle always works a lot during a day and his child and wife are depressed. They complain about his job hours and they are not together enough time.

Finally, long hours of working both physical and mental can damages health of body. For example, an officer sitting for a long time will suffer from backache. For sake of our healthy it is better to work for logical time that does not make us feel ill or exhausted.

By the way of conclusion, while working three days a week can have some advantages, I believe that working more days is more beneficial for both workers and bosses due to mentioned reasons. I suggest that everyone should spend shorter time for working each day therefore they can do their best at their job also save some energy for their family.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'damage'
Suggestion: damage
...of working both physical and mental can damages health of body. For example, an officer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, by the way, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73015873016 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52495731113 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521164021164 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5972882504 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330639903516 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118112704011 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893193068865 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206086309714 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648910573781 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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