TPO 30 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours Use spec

People often hold different views on whether we would be happier if we work three days a week for long hours than five days a week for shorter hours. Based on personal experience of my life, I disagree with the saying that it will be enjoyable to work three days a week for long hours since I care about work-life balance, take my health seriously, and like to eat dinner at a restaurant.
First of all, I care about work-life balance and working five days a week for shorter hours makes me happier. There are lots of things I would like to do after work. For example, I am a fan of jogging and jogging along the river can ease my pressure from works. That is to say, I don't have to worry about the upcoming presentation and enjoy my own time. If I work for longer hours, I will not have time to do exercise. Thus, I can't escape from my works and I will definitely be really upset.
Secondly, being healthy is the key to me and working longer hours harms my health. According to the news, sitting on a chair all day without exercising will increase the chance to get fat and cardiovascular diseases. What's more, I can't go to the gym after work at ten o'clock since it is more likely for the gym to be closed at that time. As a consequence, I won't live happily without having a healthy body. If I work three days a week for shorter hours, I can go to the gym after work. Hence, I will be satisfied with my body figure and the good status of my health.
Last but not least, the thing I want to do after work is going to a restaurant and having a shorter working time enables me to eat at a restaurant after work. It is really delightful to have a delicious dinner, tasting Italian cuisine and cheesy hamburger after work. If I have to work three days for long hours, it is possible that I have to eat at the office. As a consequence, I have to eat cereal with milk for dinner rather than hot fresh food at the restaurant. It really brings me a bad mood.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree that we will be more delighted if I work three days a week for long hours. That is to say, I take emphasis on work-life balance, my health, and dinner at a restaurant.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
... pressure from works. That is to say, I dont have to worry about the upcoming presen...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...l not have time to do exercise. Thus, I cant escape from my works and I will definit...
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Suggestion: What's
...to get fat and cardiovascular diseases. Whats more, I cant go to the gym after work a...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... cardiovascular diseases. Whats more, I cant go to the gym after work at ten oclock ...
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Suggestion: o'clock
... I cant go to the gym after work at ten oclock since it is more likely for the gym to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, first of all, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.20722891566 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42679913521 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424096385542 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4393925595 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1428571429 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340513862691 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124462231466 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972451204479 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237629238145 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504124556747 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.14 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.6 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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