There is no doubt that nowadays, we have an advance technology which has played a prominent role in people's lives. No one can deny the effects of technology on our private lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is what is the people reaction about changing the world lead to advance technology? Some people may hold this viewpoint that alteration of the world makes people less happy of daily lives. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that changing the world makes people lives more calm and satisfy. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
One of the main reasons coming to mind at first is that people spend most of the time in order to improve the quality of live. In other sense, by changing the world resulted in advance technology. So, family more paying attention to new technology such as kind of media, cars, education and so on. An empirical in the Asia shows that 80% of the majority of people who challenge with new technology, are not satisfy of their lives and have less self-confidence compared to those who lives in the past. This clarifies the fact that nowadays, people are less happy and satisfy of their lives.
Another equally important reasons is that from a psychological standpoint, people who challenge with new society and technology become very soon sensitive and anxious. Due to the new technology, children and juveniles like to use and interact with technology such as using smart phone, lap top and so on. So, parent should more focus of children ' demand. As a clarification, parent should making more money and more time in order to go shopping instead of having a leisure time or stroll and playing sport as refresh their body. Hence, after a period of time, they become anxious. Consequently, they less communicate with others as spend fun time.
In spite of the aforesaid merits, people who lives in the past, had more confidence and more content of daily live. In fact, they had a good relationship with each other and enjoy the manner of lives. This means that, they had not any sophisticated technology and advance society. To illustrate my point, my father said that, they had not any advance education, vehicle and media, but their lives were please and happily.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that, however, new technology cause more advantages for people but it makes people's lives less happy and the communication between people become significantly fragile and unstable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'satisfied'.
Suggestion: satisfied
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90114942529 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62964792758 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494252873563 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5415647415 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6956521739 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9130434783 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254523012421 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756188746627 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655495436876 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158227670171 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616029306186 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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