No doubt this era is technologically advanced and is advancing more and more in the field of art, technology, science and various other fields. With the changing of this world, people and their lifestyle of people is also changing drastically and, this change is a curse or a boon for humans is often debated. To my opinion, this change in the world had made people less happy and less satisfied with their lives today than people in the past. Among plentitude of reason few are highlighted in the passage below.
First and foremost, emerging new trends and technology enforce people to keep update with them. In order to know how, what and why in the society people need to be keep themselves up to date with current technologies, so as to pace with them. Not only this, people don't have time to spend with their children due to heavy work schedule. For example, it is difficult for a person to be part of advaced society, who is devoid of computer knowledge and, as a result cannot jell along with people. However, person in the past did not require knowledge of such things to be a part of social gathering instead people focused on one skill to earn them employment and attributed rest of their time with their family.
Second impoerstant point for cosideration is, with increasing demands of skills for such advancements, person need to compete it's own class to live a wealthy and a happy life. For instance, students study for more than 12 hours today in order to stand out of the crowd,s ometimes have to sacrifice other interests of their own just to score well in academics. Professionals to have to study in order to fuldill demands of evolving trends and technologies and to earn a good life. Consequently, people are never satisfied with their life and work because competancy will never end. Unlike past days when people did not have much to compete yet they were happy.
In a nutshell, to sum up the assertions I will restate that people in this busy schedule have no time for themselves to be happy and this competition or urge to perform better than the crowd will persistanly insist on living such life and may be even for years to come. Threfore, turning human more into a machine working almost for twenty hours a day to live a life unhappy and unsatisfied.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s up to date with current technologies, so as to pace with them. Not only this, people d...
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Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...o pace with them. Not only this, people dont have time to spend with their children ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , s
...today in order to stand out of the crowd,s ometimes have to sacrifice other intere...
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Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'performing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: performing
...o be happy and this competition or urge to perform better than the crowd will persistanly ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, no doubt, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67245657568 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57133748095 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531017369727 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1185815042 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.6875 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1875 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268922165721 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985439406835 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983687928258 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167496373107 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854322783588 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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