I think young people today have influence on the suture society about important decisions, and they would gain even more influence as technology advanced. The reason is that young people can gain and spread information and knowledge via new techs, finding truth and developing a clear thought from communication. As well as they are more actively in social movement and more willing to take an action to change the society. People also more willing to trust the young people's good intension.
Young people knowing very well using internet, which will provides then the Information and knowledge that always been an important part ini the progress of making a decision. As it often require a comprehensive thought and debates, young people can use the tech to acquire and discuss about it, developing a solid and persuasive statements, then spread to even more people to increase their influence. Also by the support of the tech, young people can bypass the information block by the authority or companies that they could access the truth behind it, which would makes young people see thing more clear.
And since young people do not have that much burden to bear or complicate profit exchange network, our society tend to put more trust to the young people. They are more tend to make some bold statement and honest criticism, which are often has makes a well intent result. As young people are more active and more willing to take some actions, their voice are more obvious and loud to be hear. To some extent, these actions such as student movement would sometimes result in a revolution, cause a profoundly influence and change to the society.
To be a conclude, it is young people's actively intervene into this would with their well intention and the support of technology that make them gain more influence on the important decisions to the future society.
- TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe 60
- TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe 60
- TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe 60
- Integrated Writing TPO32 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ore people to increase their influence. Also by the support of the tech, young peopl...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...access the truth behind it, which would makes young people see thing more clear. A...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('profoundly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('influence') instead of another adjective.
...sometimes result in a revolution, cause a profoundly influence and change to the society. To be a ...
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Line 7, column 7, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ce and change to the society. To be a conclude, it is young peoples actively intervene...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, then, well, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95859872611 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49267050036 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493630573248 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.5691566245 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.75 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175954171786 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799062574613 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579784436262 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13135095704 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326383759575 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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