When thinking about the issue that youngsters have no influence on critical decision that determine the future of society as a whole, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that children should have the right to vote the major issues, since getting involved in the social events enable them to accumulate knowledge thus they can make better choices when encounter hardship. However, from where I stand, young citizens should not participate such issues for they are still lack of expertise and experience.
First and foremost, people need their previous experience to help them make decision, which kids obviously possess little, so it is arduous for them to tackle national agenda. Therefore, the primary task for youngsters is study, and only by study they would have enough knowledge and can make up the lack of experience. Take myself who is a college student as an example. Once my state implemented a policy that the retire age will prolong since 2018. And I cannot comprehend the reason why government execute such a enforcement, therefore I strongly dissented from this idea and told my father about it. My father later told me the cause and benefits of the policy, since then I started to support this idea. In this way, if we youngsters attend the national events too early, we may not have enough expertise to cope with them.
Furthermore, juveniles are so young that their minds are not mature enough to deal these issue comprehensively and objectively. They are inclined to make choices which are conducive to themselves. For instance, if the government decide to carry out an act that students are forbidden to use cell phone in class, then students would presumably reject the act since the act is detrimental to their benefit. As a result, teenagers are too young to give a unbiased vote on major issues.
In a nutshell, not only do minorities are deficient in professional knowledge and experience, but also they are prone to make decision arbitrarily. So I strongly endorse that they should not get involved in such crucial decisions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...Once my state implemented a policy that the retire age will prolong since 2018. And I cann...
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Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... the reason why government execute such a enforcement, therefore I strongly disse...
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Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...result, teenagers are too young to give a unbiased vote on major issues. In a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03179190751 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70676582701 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566473988439 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5949055329 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8125 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105060397082 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0323539499652 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500149436811 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0608070477401 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403312516865 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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