Undoubtedly, it is an unfortunate fact that modern life is associated with complexity that stems from the rapid pace of change. However, despite all these difficulties, I disagree with the idea that this could adversely affect people’s spirits. In fact, almost all individuals now take advantage of the welfare that resulted from this new lifestyle. The reason why I support this opinion is discussed in the following passage.
Firstly, the most significant benefit of modern life is saving more time. Obviously, the increasing number of different technologies is aimed at doing more activities in shorter time periods. Consequently, this brings enough leisure time to people to spend with their family. Being with family gives the strong feeling of belonging that certainly enhance the inherent happiness. Not only this, when a person has more free time he or she would find it valuable to develop their own field of interest. For example, a housewife is able to save a lot of time when she cooks using a microwave device so she can spend her free time painting or practicing an art course; that would obviously lead to more satisfaction.
Furthermore, better economical conditions is another advantage of modern life. There is no doubt that increasing a large number of job opportunities and higher salary is one of the remarkable achievement in developed societies. As a result, it is quite likely that people tend to possess enough budget to invest on their enjoyable hobbies. Recent research showed that the average number of adults who has at least a an annual journey has been increased during the last two decades. According to the observations, this improvement underlies the fact that the average salary of an individual has been enhanced at the same time.
Finally, increasing amusing facilities is another good reason that people are now happier. In fact, the number of amusing places such as amusement parks and camping sites has been remarkably increased by twice during the last few years. Therefore, people can freely choose to go to a place where they experience a day full of joy and excitement. There, they can also find themselves accompanied by others who share the same happiness. For instance,
Overall, taking into account all these factors, I personally believe that modern life not only could not affect the people’s satisfaction, but also it provides them with more free time, sufficient budget and growing amusing facilities which eventually resulted in more happiness among communities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ore satisfaction. Furthermore, better economical conditions is another advantage of mode...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...life. There is no doubt that increasing a large number of job opportunities and higher salary is ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...erage number of adults who has at least a an annual journey has been increased du...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...erage number of adults who has at least a an annual journey has been increased durin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... share the same happiness. For instance, Overall, taking into account all these f...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'at least', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'in short', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224890829694 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.157205240175 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113537117904 0.0866891130778 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0633187772926 0.046263068375 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0414847161572 0.0685040099705 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113537117904 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.056768558952 0.0351676179071 161% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85541214333 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0218340611354 0.0309702414327 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0982532751092 0.0887237588012 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0152838427948 0.0209618222197 73% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0218340611354 0.0139019557991 157% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2549.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 408.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.24754901961 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389705882353 0.338922669872 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276960784314 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210784313725 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.15931372549 0.112833075102 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85541214333 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575980392157 0.524397521467 110% => OK
Word variations: 68.4619886317 59.2087087015 116% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3809308336 48.84282405 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.45 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.95 0.644075263715 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 48.0960784314 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.50833333333 1.45489161554 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268344026221 0.300154397459 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0947163753666 0.103427244359 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0832348984708 0.0752933317313 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484108409559 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173658600266 0.151897553556 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103741870103 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412070931194 0.0781384742642 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.266893021826 0.336927656856 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0974153900229 0.067059652881 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169310549594 0.210909579961 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389247347627 0.0618886996521 63% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.