In today's society the question of whether is more difficult to teach children now than it was in the past due the fact they spend so much time on cell phone, video games and in front a computer has become controversial among people in many circles and camps. Different people have a variety of responses to this topic based on their cultural, social or even familial background. As far as I concern, I believe that this behavior truly makes things harder in educating children.
To begin with, although all this technology makes easier the access to information, children usually spend a lot of time doing thing not related to educational means. They spend hours on online games, web chats and social networking. None of these activities help them acquire knowledge. In addition, some research reveals that the interest in school decrease in kids that spend more time in these technologies, appears that their concentration diminishes in class because they are anxious to use a computer or smartphone.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that cheating is easier than has ever been. Since the access to information is not a problem anymore, the youngster copies homework and papers from web without even read or do some amendments. Therefore, teachers around the word has reporting that the use of cell phone during academic tests is rising which suggest that kids are cheating more and more. For instance, my cousin of 12 years old was suspended from school for sharing a picture of his test solved with his classmates during an exam.
To sum up, the use of technology in modern's life has lead us to a big challenge in educating children. I think that due the fact that children are using badly their smartphones, computers and internet, it is important to parents to control and moderate the access of these technologies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In todays society the question of whether is more difficult to teach children now...
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Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erate the access of these technologies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95819935691 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69013677114 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601286173633 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3709824967 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.615384615 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25879990675 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784472215814 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747607229029 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139210112154 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731918052851 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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