As technology was developing day by day more electronic gadgets were producing in the market. In my opinion, it is very difficult to educate children at present than in the past because of these cell phones, online games, and social networking sites. Children are lacking concentration and interest to educate.
First, more electronic devices are available now with less cost. In the past, there are no such devices and these gadgets are very costly to buy. However, nowadays the production of electronic gadgets such as tablets, mobile phones, computers are more and they were available at a low price. Where each and every member in a family have one such device. Furthermore, there is a lot of time for students to study in the past, because of less electronic devices. Nevertheless, at present children are easily getting deviated from the studies. As a result, they were unable to study.
Second, children are unable to concentrate on the subjects because of cell phones, online games, and social networking sites. As the technology was improving day by day, the easy access to mobiles and different variety of games were available. These different games and mobiles phones are attracting children a lot. Based on children interests some companies are developing such types of games. Furthermore, students were also spending time on social networking sites like Facebook, Twitter, and Skype e.t.c. to chat with their friends, because of easy access and for easy communication. In the past, they used to communicate only through letters which also used to enhance their writing skills. Similarly, students are also spending time on watching movies because of new and a variety kinds of movies like animation and cartoons. These sites are giving more happiness and excitement to children. Therefore, children are lacking the concentration to study.
In conclusion, I believe that educating children is more difficult because of the availability of increase in electronic gadgets and also a different variety of games are attracting children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As technology was developing day by day mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, similarly, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29357798165 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79931628533 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464831804281 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2699664895 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.55 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.35 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256190917348 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763228231318 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630938253881 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169087204427 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591805044347 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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