Currently, there is a big debate among people who are within the educational field, there are contrasting opinions about the effects of the modern technology on children education. Some teachers believe that children are negatively affected by technology because it takes most of their lifetime, other teachers, instead, think that the modern technology offers the possibility to use new and more effective methods of teaching. Personally, I believe that the internet gives the opportunity to develop new skills and new methods of both teaching and learning, therefore I do not consider that educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, since now children spend most of their time using smartphones and the internet, teachers must educate their students how is the right use of them. The internet is the broadest basin of knowledge that humans have never had, therefore, teachers can use it to teach children things that were not possible in the past. For example, during a history class, they can use books as basic reference, but they can enrich their lesson showing online videos about the specific historical event or find different opinions about what is being taught, in this way they can stimulate a discussion about it, and consequently make their lessons more compelling and interesting.
Secondly, books are very expensive and take a lot of space; the use of tablets at school gives the opportunity to have all the material in one device. This is lead to lighter the children backpack and avoid all the problems related to the wrong posture, which often the students suffer. My own experience I a compelling example of this, when I was at primary school, I remember that every school day I had to bring at least 4 books and all the other school stuff, such as pencil case, diary, and notebooks. The second year in school, I had a serious problem with my back, and the doctor said that I had to avoid to carry heavy weights, so my parents had to carry my backpack until my school changed policy and decide to buy tablets. From that moment, we could use tablets at home for homework and leave the heavy paper books in the classroom, from that moment I could go to school by bus as my schoolmates and I felt very confident and keen to use both paper and digital book.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that as long as children are supervised and educated at the right use of techs, such as smartphones, the internet, and social networking websites, they are very powerful teaching instruments. Modern technology can enrich the lessons and give access at the biggest source of knowledge, this was not possible in the past where the only way to learn was through paper books, therefore, in my opinion, nowadays educate children is easier than it was in the past.
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- TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'am' (first person of "to be")?
Suggestion: am
...he students suffer. My own experience I a compelling example of this, when I was ...
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Line 5, column 534, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd notebooks. The second year in school, I had a serious problem with my back, an...
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Line 5, column 608, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid carrying'.
Suggestion: avoid carrying
...back, and the doctor said that I had to avoid to carry heavy weights, so my parents had to car...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5913425092 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9241931345 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.142857143 100.406767564 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7142857143 20.6045352989 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154568900616 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552569217414 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553000825998 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104569061988 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565072969747 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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