In the contemporary era, several responsibilities are considered necessary for a government to accomplish. A Government is in charge of supplying the community's needs and wants from supplying infrastructures to providing security for people. One of the other forms of the services which a successful government should take into special consideration is providing sufficient educational system in different levels including schools and universities. The controversial question which arises here is whether spending further budget on the education of very young children is of more significance or devoting more money on universities is prior. From my vantage point, it would be more rational to dedicate more money to expand and develop primary schools. In what follows, the most significant reasons in this regard are investigated.
The first aspect to point out is that although universities contribute to the success of a country to a large extent by giving the professional and efficient workforce to the society, more profound effects would be made if the authorities pay extra attention to the enhancement of early-age schools. At schools, great values are transferred to students, the very primitive attitudes are taught, social interactions, though very limited and rudimentary with respect to the real social interactions in the society, are practiced, and generally, the fundamentals of developing a person's character in real life are taught there. Accordingly, if a society's goal is to reach success by having wise, cultured, and knowledgeable citizens, it should put extra attention to the structure of its schools and educational system. A good example of the mentioned claim is Japan which is considered a successful and developed country. A lot of evidence supports the idea that Japan's success in having such technology and social system is due to its educational system especially its schools. It is worth to mention that Japanese primary schools focus on teaching good behavior and valuable attitudes rather than making the students' minds occupied with lessons and assignments.
Moreover, on the one hand, university students are mainly adults who are capable of self-studying and solving the problems by themselves. On the other hand, young very children are the more susceptible population of society and need extra attention in both care and education. Subsequently, regarding the fact that it is impossible to leave children by themselves to study and attain the needed qualities for a person, special programs should be considered for the school curriculums to nurture and educate the young children. Considering this aspect, school teachers should pass serious and specific teaching courses in order to become qualified for such a demanding job. Taking into account large number of young students in a country and consequently, the large number of teachers needed at schools with respect to universities, providing the facilities and workforce entails the government to devote more budget to the education of very young children.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that it is momentous for a society to dedicate a sufficient amount of money to its schools even more than universities to guarantee its success. Although the government should provide the best facilities for a universities including professors, constructions, lab equipment, and various funds for different purposes, since fundamental learnings, which are considered necessary for a future citizen and even future university student, are taught and learned at schools and also the students are more suggestible and need particular education, the government should spend more money on the education of very young children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...rally, the fundamentals of developing a persons character in real life are taught there...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... should provide the best facilities for a universities including professors, cons...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a university' or simply 'universities'?
Suggestion: a university; universities
... should provide the best facilities for a universities including professors, constructions, la...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3175.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53135888502 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16762732357 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470383275261 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 993.6 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.4078791491 48.9658058833 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.105263158 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2105263158 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281116691976 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846378358734 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626692598767 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18808804833 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599244552144 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 86.8835125448 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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