TPO 51 Writing Independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, movies and television play a pivotal role in broadcasting news, information, and other programs. Many people spend significant time watching their favorite programs on TV, especially young people who may devote several hours watching football games, movies and so on. Therefore, these programs could have noticeable impacts, whether positive or negative, on their lives behavior. The controversial question which arises here is whether movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. From my vantage point, the positive effects of the media outweigh their negative effects. In what follows, the most important reasons will be explained.
The first aspect to point out is that most young people look for ways to spend their free time and watching television is a decent choice. Watching movies and television together with their family members or friends not only could provide a chance to fill their free time and have fun and entertainment, but also enables them to relieve their stress and establish stronger relationships with their parents. For instance, my parents have hectic lives, and they spend a lot of time at work. Even when they are home, they are busy with their own works. But, things are different when we watch TV. Watching a late night show together will gather all of us together and will strengthen our relationship by getting us to laugh together about the jokes and talk about different issues. Afterwards, since all of us are together, I can talk about my problems at school and they can give me some advice which could be very instructive and helpful.
Furthermore, watching television would provide an opportunity for young people to follow the news in a short time without which they have to spend a lot of time reading different newspapers and sources. Moreover, through television, they might see videos from different parts of the world which are related to the news. Therefore, television could offer a better way of attaining worldwide news. Moreover, some instructions about social issues and behaviors could be trained through television. For example, some programs involving some points about sanitation, social behaviors at public places, and so on could teach young people to behave in acceptable ways. This method is even more helpful than the programs held at schools which teach appropriate behaviors to students. Also, there might be some documentaries about different topics including science, technology, social and political issues which could be really fruitful by training young people to become more knowledgeable about various subjects.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that movies and television involve more positive impacts on the way young people think and behave. Although there might be some movies or television programs which promote harmful thoughts and behaviors, most of the programs usually serve influential ways to provide fun and entertainment for people. Moreover, some programs broadcast scientific documentaries as well as news or other programs which could be extremely informative for young individuals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2690.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76023477262 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.381464731 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.956521739 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7391304348 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199578095648 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683961428053 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897494986843 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146031205096 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846864436227 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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