Nowadays, finding a new job is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Many students try to find a secure job after graduation to save their future. I am sure that some people believe that in the past, people could identify a secure job more easier than today, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally disagree that in the old decay, people can choose the right career more easier than today. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, using the new advanced technology helps people to identify the secure career, which is considred more suitable for them according to their interests. Recently, many people attend job fair in person or online to gather many new information about the positions. For instance, last summer, he was looking for a new position in long term facility company. In fact, he started to find information about this position online. So, he found a tremendous news about this job. For example, he knew how much he will get paid per hour, how many hours he will work per week, and what is the job description. Consequently, he would able to decide if it will be suitable fir him or not according to his interessts. As a result, he got the job and he is so successful person right now. Furthermore, he is taking a very good salary and he lives the life that he always dreamed of. On the other hand, if he did not get in touch with these information online, he could not get this career and he might be frustrated.
In addition, increase the relationship between people provides them with a good opportunity to find a secure job for the future. People can share a lot of ideas togather and them can support each other to start privite bussines. For example my friend is living in Spain and he has a lot of friends over there. Last year, he graduated from art school and he was in a good relationship with his roommate. In fact, they decided to start their own bussines. So, they got new secured job.
In sum, I strongly agree that people can find secure job today more easier than before. This is because new technolgy helps people to find more information, and becasue the good relationship helps people to open privte business together
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ast, people could identify a secure job more easier than today, while others would disagree...
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Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...cay, people can choose the right career more easier than today. I feel this way for two rea...
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Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much new information', 'a good deal of new information'.
Suggestion: much new information; a good deal of new information
... job fair in person or online to gather many new information about the positions. For instance, last...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'tremendous news'.
Suggestion: tremendous news
...bout this position online. So, he found a tremendous news about this job. For example, he knew ho...
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Line 3, column 931, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...r hand, if he did not get in touch with these information online, he could not get this career an...
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Line 7, column 64, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...e that people can find secure job today more easier than before. This is because new techno...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58765432099 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49833842055 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513580246914 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4693946475 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7826086957 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6086956522 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21739130435 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117531806786 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390945749318 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286483727623 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794879831884 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327415526702 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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