TPO 38 Integrated writing

The reading and lecture both discuss the idea of developing an international fund to keep the biodiversity of forests. While the reading provides three benefits of the international fund to protect the forests, the professor refutes, saying none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that the international fund will encourage the forest land oweners to protect the agriculture and avoid any forest damage. On the other hand, the professor nargues this notion by saying that by increasing the population, many farmers will raise more crops and use many advanced technologies. For example, they will use harmful pesticides. So, this technique will participate in more pollution like water pollution. As a result, this problem will get worth because this is not a good idea.

In addition, the article mentions that we can use the international fund to improve economic village in forests. So, people can decrease the pressure on forests. However, the professor rejects this idea by pointing out that international fund will dispense money on forest owners and they are not residences. So, it will not ended up to get back to us. Furthermore, they cannot use this money in appropriate use.

Lastly, the reading states that the international fund can increase the forest biodiversity. So, people can find many different resources. Nevertheless, the professor questions this point by explaining that this idea will encourage people to plant many trees. However, these trees will not achieve the goal of forest biodiversity. Consequently, this is not an accurate idea at all.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'end'
Suggestion: end
...hey are not residences. So, it will not ended up to get back to us. Furthermore, they...
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Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...orest biodiversity. So, people can find many different resources. Nevertheless, the professor ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, so, while, for example, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 253.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32806324111 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94955955633 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517786561265 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5663739796 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2941176471 110.228320801 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8823529412 21.698381199 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.04 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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