TPO-42 - Independent Writing Task Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Hoom on Mon, 10/23/2017 - 16:13

In today's hectic world we live in, in which prosperity is considered extremely important for every individual, a person would not be off the point to assume that people's tasks at work play a key role to that end. However, whether workers want to conduct many different kinds of tasks during their workday or do same tasks all they long, is a contentious issue in this regard. One popular opinion regarding this issue states that conducting several types of tasks during the workday is more satisfying for workers. I personally concur with this thesis and attempt to bring the most discernible reasons in the ensuing lines.

One imperative idea coming to mind at first is about workers' prosperity in their tasks. It is crystal clear that conducting similar tasks for a whole day is so boring and this remarkable fact leads to decreasing in workers' efficiency. Thus, they could not accomplish their best, consequently, they could not be prosperous in their career. However, if they had performed many various kinds of tasks throughout work-day, they would have used their best efficiency toward performing their job. To illustrate my point, let me elaborate upon it by presenting an example. Consider an accountant employee embarking on doing his day-work. If he did the same task such as merely did accounting, he would be definitely tired and bored. But if he knew that he had to conduct the other different tasks, he would have been stimulated and this situation is an incentive for him. Thereby, the more various tasks an employee should accomplish, the more success he would acquire in his occupation.

Increasing employees' self-reliance is the second interesting point which deserves some words here. It goes without saying that workers which conduct a plethora of different tasks in their work-day, could learn more information and careers. Thereby, if they had much information about numerous matters, they would have more self-confidence. According to Dr. Hasan Zohoor, a prominent and highly respected psychologist at the University of Tehran, having more information about some topics and career increase people's self-esteem and also leads to the gratification of people's ego. This provides further legitimacy and support for the idea that performing many types of tasks at work positively affect employees' self-confidence.

To put it briefly, considering the two reasons that I gave, although conducting different kinds of tasks might be hard for some individual, it is more satisfying for employees and also increases the employee's prosperity as well as their self-esteem. All in all, it is highly suggested a survey be conducted in order to assess the general opinion of employees and some experts in this area regarding such an issue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...owever, whether workers want to conduct many different kinds of tasks during their workday or ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 675, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'account'
Suggestion: account
...he did the same task such as merely did accounting, he would be definitely tired and bored...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...ng for employees and also increases the employees prosperity as well as their self-esteem...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, thus, well, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87896655559 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516853932584 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6607239174 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.7 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275496894254 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905088797755 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798811889485 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177509475662 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062246666859 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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