TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th
Throughout history, families have played a dominant role in individuals' way of living. In order to having a healthy society and one's progress, it is essential to pay attention to the role of parents. but in these civilization societies, parents are involved by their jobs intensely. The inevitable question which has caused heated debate among some academicians is that how parents should manage their free time with their children. There exists a Fruitful discussion which encompasses different opinions. some people are inclining toward the opinion that parents should these times to control children’s' homework, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective; and they contend that they should spend their time to play and having some fun. As a matter of fact, I agree with the second group. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explicate the most outstanding reasons and provide some details which can aptly elucidate my points of view.
The first prominent point to be mentioned is that parents have a significant and undeniable role in children’s' success, mental and physical health, and happiness. parents can assign their time to play with children in addition to teaching them. To shed light on this issue, parents can teach their children responsibility and being a leader through(by?) giving some permission. When I was a kid, my parents had a little time for me. but in their free time, they played with me, and I was as a manager at the bank. Their actions due to I know about my interests and talents and selected management as my major (in university) in bachelor’s time.
Another equally noteworthy and exquisite point supporting this opinion is that during a play, they can be aware of children's features, such as being introverted or shy, menaces and etcetera. Hence, they can prepare children to attend the community. In Sharif university of Tehran, one of the most prestigious universities in my country, a very reliable research conducted recently regarding training system during outsides game. this study showed some awesome statistics which revealed that 60% of defects of children can detect and solve to help them for having a decent job and a better life.
In the aforementioned reasons, lead us to the conclusion that parents can make a responsibility and solve some ethic’s problems during the games and sports, Consequently, they can manage their homework and lessons in school.
- In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 81
- Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. 83
- TPO 40- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
- Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. 83
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 83
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, regarding, second, so, whereas, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25510204082 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93347381752 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56887755102 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4304558977 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263455224713 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815255237774 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691977026086 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155349444861 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865194084502 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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